Hey Avawitonsky!
This is an interesting piece as you've incorporated cultural references. This has helped you in engaging your readers even more with your writing.
Content wise, you seem to be using your writing to describe this person/child and his doings and presence. You've made it dramatic by effectively describing his activities and so on. Though you're just describing this person, you're simultaneously providing extra information such as cultural references.
Grammar and Spelling wise, everything seems intact. You may want to check over the opening line, which I feel should have a question mark.
Structure wise, you've organized the content into two stanzas of seven lines each. This is a good start. Significance of both stanzas is quite unclear, but that doesn't matter much.
Poem is quite coherent as you're just describing the subject of the poem. I feel you are just describing rather than expressing and narrative. Poetry can be a descriptive, but poets often use a variety of connecting descriptions rather than just targeted at one subject.
Literary Devices are used in here as you're seen describing. I am able to find adjectives, metaphors, and personification.
My personal rating for this work is 3.3/5
Keep writing
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