Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
Anyway let's get right to it,
Its new year's eve today. Soon to be 2083. Years ago people dreamed of a future world filled with greatness. Nowadays, only men can vote. Women must either be a house wife or get a job as a stripper or prostitute. After graduating high school women have to find a man to marry since they can't go to college. Once women had suffrage, but that's in the past.
I sigh as I hear a pounding fist on my door. I know what I've done is illegal. I grab the leather grip of the pistol and bring it up to my temple. The door breaks down as my finger hooks onto the trigger...
Well, here we go, yet another story of a terrible, terrible future that I've run into. Well I don't think I've run into this idea specifically but things that are very closely related to this, I have seen several time because well, the future is supposed to be terrible apparently...xD.
But hmm, at any rate this is still a pretty decently well done future here, you've certainly painted a very bleak picture right off the bat that can certainly catch a reader's attention right away, and well if you manage to differentiate this story from the others out there, it'll be just as awesome as al the other premises.
And well, now the ending here is quite cool, well, pretty sad by the looks of it, its implying that something quite horrible happens there, but as far as attention grabbing goes, you don't really get too much better than that. And the way you have chosen those words there, it really conveys a sense of time running out and an act of desperation almost. Now having said that, I feel like the first paragraph and the second paragraph are a bit disjointed there, they don't really seem to be connected to each other at all. Its a little bit weird there, individually great paragraphs, but together a bit confusing. At any rate that's all I gotta say here.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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