Published November 17, 2011
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Hey Artsy! Dogs here with your review today! THis is a great piece of poetry! I really love the imagery you use and how you connect all of that to a smile and your analogy is fantastic! I love poetry that is strong in imagery and that imagery is based off of one metaphor. That can be very difficult to do and you pulled that off very well, although if you didn't tell me that it was about a smile I probably wouldn't have been able to figure it out but that is partially because I am incompetent...
Anywho! I love the opening stanza. Very good. Well thats all I really have to say! Keep up the good work!!!
TuckEr EllsworTh
I am in love with the second and fourth Stanza's, they radiate creativity, I have never heard such a unique and beautiful way of desribing a smile, it made me think of my favorite Defontes songs :3 I really didn't find a fault in there. I thought everything was neat, and flashy. Brilliant job!
ARTSY!! Hi there, my friend! ^_^
Ooooh, for the club you talked to me about. That is so awesome. And, oh wow, this is lovely. You've done a great job creating a creative imagery. You let your words fly around your imagination and you transformed one simple and common topic into some new art. Great job!
~Solly<3