Published August 10, 2010
I wake up, get ready, eat my food, and just feel blank. My mind goes on a mission, searching for meaning, but is left empty. I never seem cto be able to find meaning in life. Nobody can help me. I look outside and see a whole world waiting to be discovered. Seeming to lurke in front of me. I strugle to get close to this outside world, but fail. I see laughing children, and happy adults, both with eyes estatic, and joyfull. Why can't I be like them. I feel like an outcast, because I have no such life. Why cant I find such love and compasion like them. I feel so akward, because I am alone and empty. Maybe someday, but not any day soon, I will be like them.
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I really like this poem i can really relate to this sometimes i feel the same this was Awsome
Hi Ariberry. I just wanna point out a few spelling errors in this.
OK. Overall, I found this really... Blah. The narration was a tad boring. Not to be rude. Maybe some touching up with the spelling and adding some more emotion.