Oh Baby, How could you?

I liked some parts, such as loosening the buttons, but the entire thing was awash in "I" and "Oh baby". Repetition has its place, but you overdo it and it takes away from the poem. A few are alright, but don't go overboard. And I agree with Krupp that your lines shouldn't all start with I.

Punctuation and stanzas would also do this some good. At the moment, it's hard to tell where thoughts and ideas begin and end.

I think if you cleaned up your format and took out some of the repetition, this would be good. Keep writing!

There was something about this that made me want to read it all, yet made me feel like it was lacking something.

Punctuation was a big problem in this as you can't read it with a good flow if there is no punctuation. This might help: viewarticlebody.php?t=18791

Another thing is that although there is a lot of emotion in this it seems to not be oozing out as much as it could. Try to be more specific, try to pin point little things that hurt. For example, when you talk about kisses and buttons it is more emotive than just 'I love you'. Also, try not to ruin the effect of repetition by repeating absolutely everything.

I saw you slipping of her shirt

I know deep down beneath the sand where I shall rest in peace

You started most of your lines with, 'I' and I'm not complaining; but it might be better if you considered starting a few of the lines with different words or phrases the poem won't sound so animated. This is just an example:

I left you a note
I told you I gave up
I told you I was heartbroken
I told you I still loved you

Try doing this instead: (Don't literally follow my example, but you get the point.)

Left you a note today,
it mentioned I was giving up
and that I was heartbroken.
But I still love you regardless.

at any rate, not a bad start for a try at poetry. A lot better than what I did when I first started out.

Uhh, this is uhh, interesting. It's a bit graphic but it's okay since you rated it anyway. I was nice. Emotions are very strong which is good.

Interesting.

You have quite a few neglected capitalization-needing words, especially 'I' a few times. A couple of times, you need to capitalize the "Oh" in "Oh baby". Also, punctuation really needs to be here. Commas, periods, etc. All are a bit lacking.

I never gave up on you, baby