Published June 14, 2011
What will happen when it all comes to an end?
What will happen when the sky opens and fire falls?
Freedom will cry out
We'll fall to our knees
We'll welcome your name
And love you till the end
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Overall: Yes we will.
Great job, great poem, and the shortness was direct and to the point.
I love it.
God Bless!
Keep Writing!
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-Jojo
Quite a morbid opening line, however it very effectively grabs the readers attention and you carry on grasping the feelings and possibly the fear of death throughout the poem. I also think that it could be developed into a longer piece of writing in which you could possibly expand on the idea of 'loving' whoever or whatever it is that you mention in the last line.
Very good writing! Keep going!
I liked this poem. It was short, simple, and easy to remember!
But I think this could be the start or the end of much longer poem. But I LOVED it nonetheless.
Keep Writing!
KJR