cute cuddly poems

Hello, annabanana. Lioness here for a review.
You have a nice, little poem here. I can imagine this in a children's poetry book. The rhyming is excellent. I have an issue with the rhythm though, it's as if you were too frantically trying to fit the rhymes in. Consequently, the poem doesn't flow.
There are a few grammatical mistakes here, such as capitalization and whatnot. Also, there is a spelling mistake on the first line.
Jiucy should be spelt Juicy.

Below is how the poem should look which mistakes rectified.

A juicy fine pineapple hops along my way,
I stop to ask what brings you here astray?
Well, I'm all grown up and I'm here to bright and shine,
Well, Mr. Pineapple you're looking mighty fine.
That I do, now what can I say?
I look kind of fine on a hot summers day!

On the third line, it doesn't make sense.
"I'm here to bright and shine."
Don't you mean: I'm here to brightly shine?

Apart from that, a really nice, innocent poem.
Well done,
Lioness

Moved then. ^_^

Er... I told you to click the 'Literary' tab up top... ^_^ Then on into the Poetry forums.

No matter, we'll have Imp move it. (Thank you, Imp, for finding this - and for the offer the set it in the right place).

She did intend this to go in Poetry, I believe.

Hello Anna; welcome to YWS!


This is, actually, the forum for introducing yourself...and I assume you're not a pineapple or a fellow greeting one. ^_~

If you'd like, I can move this to poetry. Or you could edit in something about yourself? What you like writing or any arbitrarity you like that has some vague connection to your personality or whims...


Welcome, anyhow, again. Any questions, feel free to PM me, Imp - or any of our mods (all in green for screen-name).

IMP


EDIT: As to the poem, Anna - it's an amusing piece that reminds me of Lewis Carroll's nonsense. ^_^ But you'd be better off making certain to punctuate and capitalise.

Your 'i's need their capitalisation, as well as some other things in between. ^_^