Young Writers Society

Hola!
As I'm leaving college in another day, this struck a deep chord within me. There is much truth to this. Lovely!

Although being a haiku, I like how it packs the essence of the battle we face. Good job.

One nitpick : "Only fighting to get there"
In your previous line you had already mentioned that you are fighting. So, this line kind of seems redundant and I think you can work on a different battle perspective here.

I would love to see a little more expansion on perhaps how the battle is? It's an emotional, academic and philosophical roller coaster ride, so try to show us the battle instead of just saying that there's a battle.

Would love to see this expanded.

Let me know if you do.

Cheerios!

Hello there here is a me with a review for you but it will be rather small the reason is because it is for a review team so I ma doing reviews for other people at the same time and it is hard to make big ones anyway at least for me.

Hopes it helps.

First is that you need to put some punctuation in I mean it would help this Poem look better a lot better no offense.

I am not sure how this here poem goes with the title but your spelling was good very good oh and you need to put some more poem in here it does sound kind of weird if you read it out but I like weird stuff.

Good job I am sure you had a plot but I just did not see it.

Until later "may god be with you and good bye."

Keep writing and good luck.

~Jon~

Hopes it helped you out.

Forgive me if I rambled or something I do it a lot sorry if I did and this was a good start compared with the first thing I wrote.

A little short for what I was expecting, but I liked how you defined college as a "battle". Keep writing. Hurtado