Beautifully written, really amazing images and feelings coming across. I love this poem, actually. It was long and I didn't get bored with it before the end. I love the feeling of flying and falling and trusting that you wrote into this.
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oh my. this is such a nice piece. great job. it was a long poem but i didnt get bored at all. when you can write a long poem and keep people interested, then you have talent. i wanted to quote my favorite stanza but i just couldnt choose. great job!
Wow, this is really good. I love the title.
Its long, but it didn't loose its interest.
The end is amazing!!
I'm jelous.
Keep writing, you rock
Wow, Brad...just...wow. Why do you have to be so good at poetry? =.=
Exactly. Really strong feelings and images..and I also tend to get bored reading long poems, but not with this one!
Great job Brad.
truly epic piece, if i was you i would frame it,laminate it. Keep it safe until its published and i can purchase it =). It was strides ahead of most things i have read printed or not.
Good work, keep it up.
"We watch as if watching could save us,
but we ought to fear being a witness. We ought to know
what a witness must do. You told me"
-truly my favourite lines:off to reread it, i love the taste it leaves in my mouth.