Under the Stars

I like this.

My only concern though....does the font change color at the beginning?

such a cute poem . its amazing and the way the lines rhyme are perfect .
"
Free to intertwine and tangle, just like you and me.

Nothing in this crazy world could break our golden bond.

We were meant to be like this, forever and beyond."

i really love these lines .

"A love like ours is hard to find.

A love so innocent, and perfectly designed. "
i really like these lines as well .

keep up the good work
can't wait to read more of your works.

Hi Amosh94!
this is SapphireFlames to the review!
okay now about your poem, it was nice and I thoroughly enjoyed reading your piece!

I loved these parts of the poem:
"Nothing in this crazy could break our golden bond,
We were meant to be like this, forever and beyond"

and,
"A love like ours is hard to find,
A love so innocent, and perfectly designed"
D'awwww its soo sweet! I liked the way you have described the emotions and feelings for you love.

Now lets move on to part of corrections:
"A love so innocent, and perfectly designed"
a error should be cleared that is you should either add a comma after the innocent or use "and to seperate the two sentences. like,
"A love so innocent, perfectly designed"
or
"A love so innocent and perfectly designed"

and one more thing is that whenever you write a poem just make sure that you maintain stanzas or paragraphs. the piece above looks like a block to me( sorry for being rude but I felt that way) you could probably exaggerate the piece a bit more and could re- write the piece in stanzas and make it look proper.
look, this is just a suggestion or an advice that I am giving you.

Anyway,
I loved reading your piece it was extremely sweet and nice!
keep writing and keep it up!
If you have any doubts regarding a my review please feel free to pm me!

FutureAuthor,
SapphireFlames.

Nice rhyming you have here, each line has a good consistent rhyme with the previous.
You have some good ideas here but you also have a few cliches to look out for. Sometimes cliches are used on purpose, a familiar catchphrase to represent not only its meaning but also irony behind it. I think your poem is quite sweet so it has no irony or greater meaning in catchphrases so you may like to try some alternate descriptions.
The cliche I picked up on was:
"be it rain or shine."

I don't have much more to say on this apart from it is very generic, you should try adding a personal touch.

Hello, I was wondering if you would like a quick review? Too bad, you submitted it here so I will review anyways.


Things I liked:

-AaBbCcDd rhyme scheme. Although many, many people believes that the rhyme scheme distract from content. Which I believe not-so in this case but only because the content wasn't awh inspiring its just a cute little poem. I'm some-what confident that what you where going for, not for a published end-all be all that tells a story like The Raven, so I like it. Its cute, fun to the point and I'm sure your boyfriend liked it so it served its purpose.
-last rhyme was strong, ended it somewhat in a bang.

What can be improved (and there is more that I leave out on purpose ):

-The first two lines are cliche just because I DO here it all the time. Dreams run free and tangle with nature *or insert your other cliche word/idea here*
-Forever and beyond is one of thoese things you can use out of context because it is a saying, keep it out of writing if you are trying to write well.
-The fifth line is the only one that touched really on you two as a story and it was so ambiguous that no-one can take anything from it. Personal experiences in imagery or you name it is one of the best things that can go into a poem.
-A love like ours is hard to find seems like you are trying to hard to fit the rhyme.
-All of these seem to be coupled in two lines and don't flow with eachother. I hope you can understand.

This is ImHero, thank you for letting me review your work (even though you had no choice sense you submitted muaha)

Also, Thank you for writing!

Your hero,
ImHero