Published January 7, 2008
[pre]I'm asked so often what are my fears?
So often i lie and say i truely have none knowing i can only lie to myself for so long before it eats me away....i've been called pshyco,weird,misfit and such that after awhile i just stoped fighting it and agreed cause that is what they all wanted anyways.
If i now have to be true to myself and admit i have a fear my biggest one would be to actually admit it my second biggest one would be myself,sometimes i believe our worst enemy is ourselves.i mean if u allow yourself to believe your more then you truely are then arent we just as bad as those who spread cruel rumors to start with?[/pre]
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[pre]I'm asked so often what are my fears?
So often i lie and say i truely have none.
knowing i can only lie to myself for so long before it eats me away....i've been called pshyco,weird,misfit and such.
After awhile i just stopped fighting it and agreed cause that is what they all wanted anyways.
If i now have to be true to myself and admit i have a fear my biggest one would be to actually admit it my second biggest one would be myself.
Sometimes i believe our worst enemy is ourselves.
i mean if u allow yourself to believe your more then you truly are then aren't we just as bad as those who spread cruel rumors to start with?[/pre]
[pre]I'm asked so often what are my fears?
So often i lie and say i truely have none.
knowing i can only lie to myself for so long before it eats me away....i've been called pshyco,weird,misfit and such.
After awhile i just stopped fighting it and agreed cause that is what they all wanted anyways.
If i now have to be true to myself and admit i have a fear my biggest one would be to actually admit it my second biggest one would be myself.
Sometimes i believe our worst enemy is ourselves.
i mean if u allow yourself to believe your more then you truly are then aren't we just as bad as those who spread cruel rumors to start with?[/pre]
Hi there alyam11, welcome to YWS!
I'm going to suggest here that you put this into poetry format - right now, it's more like prose, you know? So you might want to add some line breaks and spice it up a bit with a few images.
Aside from that, I'd also advise you run it through a spell-checker and proof read for spelling and grammar mistakes, as I can see several in there.
Once you've done those things, PM me and I'll be happy to give you a proper critique on the content etc. I'm sure the poem will get a lot more interest when it's cleaned up a little!
Cheers,
~bubbles