The weight in my heart's starting to get heavier, the suffocating feeling I have in my stomach is growing, and so is my fear. Fear, what a strange and particular word, it can drown you in so many different ways. This time it's drowning me in goodbyes. Goodbye to my four walls, these walls have seen me cry my lungs out, go crazy due to the smallest thing, sing lyrics that I know better than the palm of my hand; they have held pictures that show the most sincere and humble smiles, posters of stories I wish I could escape to... They are my personal box.
Still, there are worse goodbyes when you're surrounded by people who let you be and encourage you to be the best version of yourself. Those are the people worth writing about; they will be in my own safe box forever, even if they're only a memory, a letter or a glimpse of a smile. They have made me strong and shown me that weakness can be overcome.
This fear, the fear of having to let something go, will always be an open wound, something inevitable. There are always cities to leave, stories to be finished having to move on to the next chapter and planes to catch. This time I'm flying with no return, I'm leaving with an unknown future and a ticket that only goes one way.
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Hey! I really love the way you poetically described how much this trip has changed you and how much you were going to miss it. There is a good flow to this and honestly, there are no flaws from what I see
I am also planning on living in another country for a while so this blog has really made me more determined to go :p Anyways, this was beautifully written and thank you for sharing it 
Thank you!
It was really hard to leave everything behind, but now I've realize I'll always have the great memories. I hope it's the same for you 
Good luck
Thank you again!
I think you could make this a really good poem or story! If you wanted to lengthen it, you would most likely want to expand on the character, and on "the people worth writing about" (I really like that line). I think you could go really far with this! It is really well written, and from the first sentence on, it really grasps the readers attention. I was really impressed with how you were able to keep the writing the same throughout the whole thing. Normally when I write a story, I will make the first paragraph full of poetic lines and quite a large vocabulary, but then, later on I get lazy and do plain-old normal writing. Good job on keeping the quality up throughout the story. I liked how you talked about the walls too. They reminded me of my room, because for a while, I had every piece of paper (it seemed) that was in my room pinned on my walls. I think this really relates to a whole bunch of people, and in so many ways. I really, really enjoyed this. Good job!
THANK YOU SO MUCH! It really means so much! That's what I want to accomplish, to grab the reader and to keep the interest and I'm glad you liked it!
It's based on my own experiences and might end up becoming a book.
Thank you again
Fantastic narrative! That first paragraph is great! The way this is written blows me away! I love that line those are the people worth writing about" as a fellow writer it makes me
Smile. Keep writing in the first person! You have a talent for it. I recommend expanding more on the character, it'll make the story even better.
Best of luck.
THANK YOU! THANK YOU! THANK YOU! It feels amazing to have someone think that my writing is good :') I'll try to expand the character futher and to put tell more about her background.
Thanks!