Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
First Impression: Well...this was quite a sweet little story to stumble upon here after looking through a couple of really intense ones earlier..yeah...I liked this one quite a lot...I like the way you've used the weather descriptions here and that ending was just what I needed to see.
Anyway let's get right to it,
Everything begins with a light summer breeze. An air that puts my hair on end and butterflies in my stomach. This air wraps me in memories intertwined with smiles that had your name, looks that left me without breath, simple words said between light touches.
Okay...that seems like a nice wholesome little start with a touch of romance just casually permeating the air around us here...on the whole a very relaxing start...that still does a decent job of getting you want to read on here....its just a really nice setting here to drop the readers into.
When I feel that the breeze has wrapped me entirely, I open my eyes and I see places where memory takes me. I see an image of that bridge where time stopped, a dialogue of that movie we saw together, a reflection of the light that slipped through the streets of Venice that time we got lost leaving the world behind, a flower that I put in my hair on that walk we took at the beginning of spring.
Okay...this is sort of like a nice little montage of memories so far...its also making me vary here...this almost seems like a remembrance of happier times at a time where things aren't going quite so smoothly....well I guess we shall see...
All of the sudden, without previous warning, it starts to rain. The clouds come filled with those moments I wanted to forget, with that sad sensation of loss. The drops fall at the same time the tears flow down my face. The breeze has been replaced by a fierce wind that wraps me in cold. I put my jacket on, but the only thing that's going to stop the storm is your arms hugging me and promising that this isn't over. And I wish to see the stars, those starts we asked to be us forever.
And yup...there we go...well...I am loving this comparison here of the weather to these opposing memories and feelings here...feels like a very poetic thing to include there in a story and it works out really well here to present the two situations.
The thunder of destiny roars reminding that he's the one who makes decisions and that rains falls for reasons; to let new flowers go and everything follow its path.
And just when I hear the wheels of the train getting close, I see that far away, in the mountain, the clouds open and the sun comes in between them. And I smile because I know that I'll always have that ray of sun. Every time I see that little piece of sun, I'll remember every "I love you" whispered at my ear, every nonsense that made me laugh, every word said with trust and, above all, that I'll see it again.
Well...that was a more hopeful ending than I was expecting and that is most definitely a pleasant surprise. I love that sort of thing...just the hope that everything can still be nice despite how bad it might be...very appropriate to the time I'm writing this review in...prolly wasn't appropriate back when this story was written...xD
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
Overall: Overall...this was a lovely little story to read here...definitely one that leaves you with a smile on your face and that's honestly all you could want...anyway...that's about all I've gotta say about this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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