I don't understand.
you said you loved me.
couldn't imagine your life without me.
needed me.
but in my dream you said it was all pretend.
three weeks later and we're starting to fall apart.
I'm starting to think my dream is coming true.
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I need more to the story. I love what you have I just think that you need to lengthen it. It shows a lot of meaning though. A lot of people go through being told one thing to get the next and I think you displayed that well in your poem. All that needs to be done is lengthen it and it would be a fantastic poem
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This is a great poem! Short but sweet - but I do wish it could have been longer. Oh well.
I love the feeling of this poem. Especially the part where the narrator says the dream might be coming true. It shows a feeling of sadness and love and showers those feelings into the rest of the poem!
The only other thing it could have had was rhyme and rhythm, a big thing in poems. But some emotional poems do not have rhymes, and I sense this is what you wanted, so I'm not counting that as a problem. In fact, I kinda like it that way
Great work!
Hi, i've come to review your poem!
First I want to say that I can feel the emotion in this poem and that is a rare quality to find in a poem (at least for me). However I feel that this could have been MUCH longer and that you could have had a better format for this poem.
Thanks for the poem
Sincerely, IHI