15 minutes before the mike
5 performances left before mine. And my stomach is aching bad, I am sweating. I feel that I am the most unluckiest person in the world and thoughts were coming in to my mind that why did I ever decide to compete in this competition. I am trying to focus on revising my speech but the moment I do that I can feel sense and hear every disturbance in the auditorium, even if a guy is whispering I can hear it when that happens I start thinking that I will certainly lose if I do not revise my speech, each line of that wretched paper was looking new to me, it was like that I had never learned them, it was awful. In this situation I could hear nothing but my own heart beat which was now suddenly beating very fast. Oh god help me, I am gone, I am done. And suddenly another terrible thing happened, one of the guys who was supposed to speak one performance before me was not there which meant that now only one more performer was left and then it was my turn to speak, and of course my teacher had some part in my confidence boost (sarcasm is the word), she simply said, you must be feeling scared but now you have the chance to speak more earlier, scared feelings, angry and tensed thoughts are all common, even perspiration( yeah thanks for summing that up) and you have the chance to get rid of them earlier, you must be feeling better now (yeah, I am feeling fabulous ) by this time the last performance had finished and the moment I dreaded the most came, the announcement of my arrival at the stage. Now, Alakshendra Singh will deliver his speech. I went up the stage and held the mike in my hand and the moment I did that I was feeling confident, I was thinking, all you got to do is just speak a few pages, I can do it. And then is started my speech and everything just fell into the right place.
The going up the stage part or the announcement maybe a little scaring and the speaking as easy as pie but according to me the hardest part is 15 minutes before the mike.
Written by : Alakshendra Singh
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Few grammar comments. "Most unluckiest" should be changed to "most unlucky." The rest of that sentence could (and should) be broken into separate sentences. It felt like it ran on, and was very confusing to read. The run-on sentences continued to be a problem, especially in the parts where you started adding comments in parentheses.
Otherwise, your emotion is very clear. Just watch out for the the grammar, which can take away from the reader's enjoyment.
Hey brother,
Quotes like this are scrambled, it was easy to understand but it had no flow. A revised version could be, "...I could hear nothing, except for my own quickened heartbeat." This happens frequently in this article. Do not get me wrong, you have a great idea here. It just needs to be polished.This article was good, at times. Other times, I felt as though, you didn't convey your point. It was as if I was reading chocolate milk that hasn't been mixed well.
Good luck,
Brownbomd