Hey there! MJ stopping by for a short review to work some reviewing magic :0
Who's Katherine Bates? After a Google search, I saw that she was the author, but it would be important to mention that earlier so you're not dumping new characters on us hereOver 120 years later, we still can see the same beauty as Katherine Bates saw
If this is a direct quote, make sure to put quotation marks around it and cite it.America remained a nation that had established unalienable rights for its citizens: right to life, liberty, and the pursuit of personal happiness.
I would put a more distinct connection here to these two ideas, maybe saying something like "it still taints the American name. Centuries later, racial segregation and equality issues still plague the American people." Something like that.This “industry” destroyed American values and freedom to such an extent that it still taints the American name. Segregation and unequal voting rights followed this horrific mindset.
This was a very inspirational piece, and it was a good reflection on our history and what our forefathers stood for. Too often, I think that we forget that our nation was founded by immigrants, some illegal immigrants at that. It's good to keep in mind the ideals that America was founded upon.
But to me, this felt incomplete. You identified the problem and gave some background to it, and you did a good job with that. However, one thing that was missing is how. How can we, as everyday Americans, combat racism? It seems like a daunting task, and it can be done, but I think even if you devoted two or three sentences to small things you can do to prevent racism, it would make this goal seem more doable.
It doesn't have to be something complicated that would require a lot of effort on the reader's part. It could be something as simple as refusing to condone racism on social media, or calling people out on racism, or not laughing at racist jokes our friends may make. We can't control what other people will do, but if we discourage their actions through our words and actions and enough people do that, it will greatly decrease the number of said jokes made.
Something else to consider is that the founding fathers had slaves, even though they wrote in the Constitution that all men are created equal. The founding fathers weren't perfect, and I'm not saying that you necessarily made this mistake, but it's easy to fall into the trap of "be like the Founding Fathers because they believed in equality and showed a perfect example of that". I think that many of them believed that slavery was wrong, but they still did it because it was free labor.
Hopefully this review was helpful, and as always, if you have any questions, let me know and I'll do my best to get back to you and help you work through them! Thanks for posting, and good luck this review day
Best wishes,
MJ
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