Hey, this is only my second time posting one of my works, so I apoligize.
This poem is in the point of view of Rose from Titanic.
On the outside I’m a well brought up lady
On the inside I’m a slave in chains
Both screaming at the tops of their lungs
I have to pretend
To be interested in him
In them
And everything they say
Though nothing I say
Seems to matter
To him
Or them
I need to break free
Of this life
But there’s no way out
So I’ll make my way
One step
Two steps
Hold on
Let go
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I think this was well written; You gave the reader a picture from the Titanic, but also you set the mood. Very nice
~Allison
Short and so very sweet.I've seen the movie a few times and I think you did a great job in capturing Rose's character and not such a bad job for your second post. I really enjoyed the how you fit the scene about her standing a the end of the ship into the end of your poem. Again great job on your work and keep it up.
PM me when you post your next work.
-Dawn