Published December 12, 2008
Think carelessly, love.
BY Adrian
Think carelessly, love.
Never worry about tomorrow,
or fret over yesterday.
Remember today, this moment.
Or else, it’ll be over.
I’ll remember your smell.
The way your hair falls
after you’ve been sleeping.
Your crooked smile,
I’ll remember, love.
No goodbyes or tears.
I’ll be here in one form
or another with you.
Live in this moment
as it is, as it was.
***Author's Note***
I've never written' a love poem before, so I decided, after the first line came into my head, that I should try. If you like this poem, check out my portfolio! I'd love to hear what you have to say.
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Hey Adrian!
I quite liked this and I believe it's another one of my favorites from you. This captured the true essence of love and not just "Don't leave me, we belong together forever, you're my all, my everything..." And though that's all fine and dandy to hear, it's nice to hear something different every once and a while.
And for your first love poem, I felt it was executed well and it was just amazingly beautiful. I didn't see any flaws and there's nothing I would change.
Favorite Lines:
It just ends this nicely and it made me cry.
Keep writing exceptional poetry,
~Angel
Hey Adrian!!!
This was great, as always. And for your first love poem, I felt it was executed well and it was just amazingly beautiful. I didn't see any flaws and there's nothing I would change.
Favorite Lines:
It just ends this nicely and it made me cry.
Keep writing exceptional poetry,
~Angel
Hi!
So, you said you wanted my (well, not particularly mine, but the readers) opinion, so here it goes:
Loved it
Favourite lines:
I will check out your portfolio. You've caught my interest.
Keep on writing!