The Life of the Wife
BY Adrian
The life of the wife is tenuous
and often strenuous.
What say you, wife?
“What’s this strife?”
“My life, as a wife, is simple.
Easy to smile from dimple to dimple,
wouldn’t you say?”
How about pay?
“What ever do you mean?
My husband and I are a team.
His money is my money.”
Isn’t that funny?
“What’s this?”
The life of the wife is tenuous
and often strenuous.
What tripe is this?
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This poem is rather funny, and pretty good. Not my type of poem, but not bad. The rhyming was a little too precise, and in the last stanza, you changed your rhyme scheme. Now, it is possible to get away with this, because it means you wanted emphasis on a certain part, but in this poem, it interrupts the flow. Could you possibly change it around? Nice job though.
Thanks.
-Adrian
Hahahaha! That was hilarious! I hear my mom say stuff like this all the time! I hear it sooo much that I could become a wife right now if I wanted to! (Which I don't. I wanna stay a kid! *cries in her little corner of dissolution as she awaits her 14th birthday* *whines about not being a kkid anymore*
The rhythm could be better though... ^^,
Anyway, this is just great! Hang on, I'm gonna feature it on my profile...There! Mission accomplished! And no death warranties needed! (Hehe!)
- Claeren