Loneliness is like sex.
It should never be spoken of
but everyone talks of it.
It creeps from the most middle of your body
into the extremities.
It leaves you numb.
I can never speak of my loneliness.
Because, if I did
surely you’d disagree.
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Woah, is all I can say. The title was eye-catching, hah.
Now, of course I wouldn't know about the full truth of that statement, but in the sense that people shouldn't speak of it, but yet they do, all the time, well, I understand that. I understand how loneliness creeps into you and makes you feel uncomfortable, and talking about it makes you feel vulnerable, just like talking about sex does. But the thing is, everyone talks about it. Everyone says it. And then it just doesn't mean the same thing anymore, you know?
A beatifully touching piece.
Sorry this isn't much of a critique, but how can I possibly be expected to find a flaw in brilliance?
Very very nice.
I loved, "It should never be spoken of, but everyone talks of it."
Incredibly touching and un-belivingly true.
How can I critique a work like this? Answer: I can't. It's too amazing!
First of all, this poem was incredibly original. Too many poems start to look so similar to one another that they blend together. But this poem demands self-identity. It's truly one of the best poems I've seen on this site, especially in terms of individuality.
Secondly, the words were so perfectly placed and the message was clear. Though the idea was abstract and delved from the norm, it is in fact something many can relate to. The anaology was between sex and lonliness was quick to pull the reader in.
Fantastic job. *gold star*
Please let me know when you post more of your work, I'd love to read it.
-dd9
This poem was amazing!
I loved your comparsion of sex and loneliness. Very different but very true!
Your first stanza was perfect! I opened up your opem to tell your audience about what you wanted to say! Good work on that!
And even though the camparsion was very different (never have I heard it used before) you still explained it very well. And I have to agree with you on it!
Well keep up the good work and I can't wait to read more of your work!
-Kelsi
This is seriously beautiful.
Enough said.
I'd like to hear about how you came up with this.
PM me about it if you can.
I really like this poem, especially the first part -- so true. (One of the first thing I'm learning at junior high. Seriously. Everyone talks about sex.)
The slight, almost bleak humour is good in a poem like this. I think it's a good way to approach the subject of loneliness rather than the usual clichéd stanzas that go on and on about terrible feelings of despair and depression. I thought this poem was kind of lacking in imagery, but that's really just a matter of personal opinion, since I know that not at all poems need to have imagery to be good and somehow the simplicity of this poem makes it nice, sort of a short, well-rounded piece. There's nothing here that you don't need.
It's like ... you like something but you don't know why, since it isn't particularly beautiful or new or intriguing. Maybe this poem could be beautiful, but now it just seems kind of bland. But I still like it, you know? Maybe I like it for its blandness. It's still good.
Well I don't really know what I'm saying, so I should just stop.
- Camille<3
Fantastic poem, it really brings to reality the subject of loneliness and it is all totally true! I love the fact that you compared it to sex too, and it leaves all cliches behind. Keep up the good work!
I especially love the line:
Such a beautiful line!
This poem was so... true, lonelyness is just as you said, like sex, and it is a taboo (is that the right word?) topic and you dont just walk down the street and saw "IM LONELY!" or else people would just think you were crazy, and you dont walk down the street and... well you get my drift
even if its title was slightly offputting lol, not in a bad way in just a omg kind of way ("did he just say sex?") lol
loved the poem, i had read it before but had never really got the chance to review it. Sorry if i cant be more helpful, again you are great at using sunjects apart from suicide, first love, "my boyfriends left me!" or another thing that has been seen so many times before. i was really surprised when i saw this poem and im glad i opened it
I just had to comment on this and say how thoroughly fantastic it is...truly very spectacular....
I love how short and sweet it is, and it actually shocks me how much effect this small amount of lines can have on a reader...
Grammatically it is sound and all I can say is well done!
Kudos to you my dear, can't wait to read more of your stuff, even if it is only half as good as this!
Keep em coming! Lol
This is the the best poem I have read on this site, not only does it have truth that the others don't but it also has humor (which I found in the last line).
I adore the line "It creeps from the most middle of your body".
It reminded me of Samuel Beckett though I can't say why.
Keep up the good work!