Published June 23, 2011
His love is like a rainbow,
As I look out the window.
Its never ending, it's always there,
Even when I'm in the depths of despair.
When times are tough,
And I have just had enough.
He lifts me up,
With his loving care,
Even when I'm crying,
His love never is dying.
When my heart has turned from him,
And my light is dim.
When I think he has forgotten me,
And he is no where to be seen.
He puts his hands out,
And tells me not to doubt.
He say's "All I have to offer you is love",
Like a dove that spreads it's wing.
Ready to fly in the spring,
His love is like a rainbow.
Its never ending, it's always there.
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Hi there, Zwinky. Nice poem, I like it very much. I have some nitpicks for you.
Add an apostrophe: It's never ending, it's always there,
I think this part would look better the other way round: Even when I'm crying
His love is never dying.
Uppercase! Remember you're talking about God.
Same.
He says, "All I have to offer you is love",
Wrong apostrophe: Like a dove that spreads its' wings.
This is so beautiful! It's meaningful, moving, and beautiful! It speaks about how some people view God as, a loyal and trusting hand that's there to help and will never let you down. That's how I think of God. I love your poem. It's touching! Awesome job and keep it up, write more!
- gleek456
such a beautifully written and touching poem
I couldn't argue anymore about this poem. All I can say is, "Amen". Keep inspiring your readers!
This was so touching! I love all the emotion, and you expressed God's love well. This is great. Just one or two things.
Really nice!