Published December 18, 2004
Planet dreams I
Come forth children, don’t be scared,
I mean you no harm, join with me, Everworld,
Let us dwell in the ever-lasting innocence and purity.
Come forth children, don’t be scared,
you have abandoned your home,
come to the ever-grace of Everworld,
let me be your guardian.
Come forth children, don’t be scared,
Planet calls for you,
step in the Spiral Weave.
Come forth children, don’t be scared,
see my true form, see my grace and beauty,
my hair are the tall pines that reach for the skies,
my blood are the rivers of sacred water, as the flow and rejuvenate the world,
my eyes are the enchanting lakes, filled with the milk of Eden.
Come forth children, don’t be scared,
For I know that Erendil was touched by the Great Dark,
But no, no, she is not dead, she is also dreaming the Planet Dream,
I shall feed you,
I shall love you,
I shall worship you, as my own children,
while She is asleep.
Come forth children, don’t be scared,
Let us sing the Star Song,
And as we dance around the Ring of The Fearie,
We will dream the Planet Dream.
Come forth children, don’ be scared,
Come, and let us dream the Planet dream…
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Mother Erendil, the haven of the Elven nation, my home...

arvy, i too, would like to know the backroud here...
makes me think, and also, who is "she"? Erendil?intriguing, tho.
lol, it's not hard to critique stuff, it's knowing how to do it.. wait, that make no sense, did it?
Interesting and appealing. It has some intriguing images, but I feel like there sould be some background...I wish I knew how to critique poetry better. Nice.