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Poetry Needs No Rhythm

by Zenith


I string together words to
Form poetry with no rhythm.
The letters stare at you
Coldly from the phone screen.
Distant and aloof.
Perhaps another half-hearted attempt
To change the world.

I don't write on paper,
Where every little scratch
Gets documented for eternity
For you must never witness
My insecurities spilling out
From in between the lines
So, I hide my true self behind
An extra press of backspace.

Still, I wait patiently for your response
Something tells me that you'll find me
Even in this inanimate text of anonymity
For I remember you once saying-
"Poetry needs no rhythm to be beautiful."


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Bars—you could turn this into a rap
I love the emotional impact
Try this on for size

Sometimes I write my poetry with no rhythm
I like my motives with no vision
Decisions with no reason
The letters they stare at you
Coldly from the phone screen.
Alone my heart sings
Distant and aloof
Words alone aren’t proof of who’s before you virtually
All these stanzas prose yet passion
Stacks of roses have some
Back to clothes matching
Like I’ll suppose you’re lacking
Perhaps my poetry to a girl is just
another half-hearted attempt
To change the world.

I don't write on paper,
Where every little scratch
Gets documented for eternity
That’s the catch, write words unworthy, wrinkle and restart
Tryna speak from the heart
But I can’t get past the first part
I laugh out loud
Envision
For you must never witness
My insecurities spilling out
From in between the lines
So, I hide my true self behind
An extra press of backspace
I write, pace, delete
My mind replete with memories
Reading things I mean but just can’t seem to complete
I breath deep, pretend you’ll be my friend again then hit send

I’m so lost
Still, I wait patiently for your response
Something tells me that you'll find me
Even in this inanimate text of anonymity, praying
For I remember you saying-
"Poetry needs no rhythm to be beautiful."
Poetry needs no rhythm to be beautiful




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BIHXY says...



Wow!!! this is actually really really good on all kinds of levels. insecurities could not have been brought out better than you have... as a fellow writer let me just say I GET YOU!!! so reading this piece, I was mesmerized because it was like you were looking right through me!!! its a wonderful feeling to know that us writers feel the same way..like generally. the persona really gets that dreaded feeling when your like at some sort of impasse with yourself. This hit different on like all levels! I'm dead impressed. anyway I really truly loved this piece and I feel like the world has done its fair share of good to deserve even more of your writing! keep blessing our screens love! your going places!!




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Wow, at first this would be a poem about poetry but there was more to it. Sometimes you just need to string words together as you said without it needing to have a coherent rhythm. But the struggle of how to classify your work is something that can plague us all. And your form of hiding your pain can be the way to let something out. Needing validity from anonymous people can be just a good feeling because this person has no attachment to you, and they say they care. And it can be just as hard to show yourself to the ones you love than it would be for strangers. Insecurities plague us all and it sucks. But if you wear them on your sleeve in public, that's just how you are. If you develop insecurities though, you feel bad for showing them to loved ones and changing. And words can just be words or they can have meaning. It just depends on how you read. Great poem, I love it.




Zenith says...


I was afraid this didn't make much sense, but you interpreted it so well. Thank you so much for the review.




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