Published March 28, 2006
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An Experimental Piece
“Begin your poem with a quote—it
increases the impact and
provides excellent voice.”
Love is like Macbeth
weeping over feminine
beards.
“Who is your audience?
What do they expect?”
Morning is like logarithm—
this of that is something else.
“Try to maintain coherency
and connect to the feelings
of your reader.”
Sex is a rule that’s
always broken.
“Avoid clichés
at all costs.”
And the company car
broke down
on the interstate.
Fortune.
-March 2, 2006
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This had a riddle in every line, and was a challenge on me to read, for I was constantly puzzling it together. But it was short, and I actually enjoyed what you did with quotes, italics and the one pure word "Fortune."
Subtly caustic, a wild paradox. Good work. Not exactly smooth on the down-go, but interesting enough (and brief enough) to make it well worthwhile. Nice.
This was interesting and enjoyable. I liked the quote/not quote bit. The last word confused me a bit, I wasn't quite sure of its purpose there. Most of the italicisms were humourous. Except for the last one, I think a bigger cliche would have worked better. Since flow and rythm isn't an issue here, then just about anything would at least sound right.