I don’t know what draws me to your presence
But I have always had a space in my heart
For you, and you only...my dearest
You are the light within the darkest nights
That fills me with brightness
However without you
The clouds start to darken
They coat the light thickly
Until it’s another dark day
Of a cruel world
I am trapped inside
Within a small walkway of Oxford close
Near to your last sighting
Before you left without a trace
The space in my heart is urging
Urging for you to come visit home
And to rock me to sleep once again
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You have haunted my thoughts for months on end
The abstract pain won’t leave my mind
My sane head is turning psycho
I need your love
I would die for you to appear in my dreams once again
In this cold, wicked twilight
On a midsummer night
I just need you to come home
Home...wherever that may be
Just come
Come to me and save me once again
From these horribly chilling emotions
They take over me
Slow as a sinking Manatee
Yet cruelly as a burning flame
On a suffering cross
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I must have a bit of your time
1 minute with you
is 1 less line on my wrist
2 minutes with you
Are 2 more smiles
3 minutes with you
Are 3 wishes of hope
4 minutes with you
Are 4 more places we can travel
In our minds
Where we are also together
In a world just for us
We are whole
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All I need is your appearance
In my mind
To make me smile
...not fake...for once
Your voice
In my mind
Makes me feel loved
Truly
In a world of lies and untrusting friendships
Our future can never meet each other
But I shall love and trust you with all my heart
And will look down upon you from god’s clouds
Up in heaven
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We can only have a small relationship
However small can be so much more
If we work through our struggles
And face it together
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You will never share your thoughts with me
Never trust me like I do when I am around you
But I will always be here
Be there
When you need someone the most
Whether you want it or not,
I can sense your emotions
Panic, stress, sadness
Joy, gratitude, pride
And I will always be a shoulder
When your in need of a person
There to speak whatever is on your mind
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Because I love you
I adore you
I will support you
And thank you
Until our last sunset together comes
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Hey!
First of all, lemme just say you have done an awesome job with this poem.
You have a captivating title, that is both intriguing and touching.
I liked how you describe this person as the light that brightens your darkest nights.
These lines are really good:
I'm not sure if this is what you meant, but I feel like this person is the only thing that could warm you during the cold chill of that cruel midsummer's night.
This part was really beautiful:
I like how you ended on a hopeful note, by implying that you have a last sunset yet to come.
I also like how you are ambiguous about the nature of your relationship with this person. I think that makes it more relatable to a reader.
On the whole, it is a beautiful poem.
Keep writing.
Heya, thank you so much for your review, I really appreciate the time taken to write this.
I was just writing this to express my feelings and I decided to upload it (i do my work on google docs). Your assumptions would be quite right also!
Thanks for reviewing and reading,
Love Rubes
I can feel the pain in your words, hang in there, at some point people like us will finally get the love that we deserve. You have real talent, and I know that no matter what anybody says you cannot make the pain go away. Keep writing, it's the only way you can release yourself from this fake world. We create our own world because it is much easier than this....this goddamn fakeness that surrounds us at every point. And even if she/he does not come back, you will still have your mind, and at times it is truly hard, you feel like there is no point in going on, but life is so beautiful, and your mind is beautiful, just hold on tight. Without darkness there can be no light.
Your words are so encouraging, thank you loads! I've just been needing her at the moment and she has been there for me this whole time, she just can't do much that's really legal...I saw her yesterday and had a chat with her about things. Safe to say I honestly have this wholesome love about her.
Stay safe
Love Rubes