hi, BrokenHeartsAri here for a review!
ok, first I hope you are doing well
so I loved the imagery you had going on it seemed more tangible for me as the reader. the communication with these emotions fits extremely well.
"You have breakdowns, meltdowns
you don't know how to speak to them about your feelings
It gets serious
You change
But all you really need is for them to give you a hug
say that it's going to be alright"
I really loved this part because I feel everyone has gone through this they needed closure. That everything is going to be ok. so they can move on.
"You break away from them
confused, shameful, and saddened by not seeing them
You don't know the difference between searching for them and asking questions
The hopeless world of reality"
I feel like it wasn't enough visual language.
I agree with blueglow you could add some similes here and there, but other than that i really enjoyed reading this work.
Keep up the great work-BrokenHeartsAri
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