Young Writers Society

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This is such a late review, I am so sorry Yoshi. (This is gonna be short sorry)

- This was an amazing beginning to the brain juice farm venture. It had good flow and everything and no grammar mistakes.

- The beginning could be improved a little bit, it felt like it was just a little bit disjointed. Instead of craziest, I would say strangest or loudest, just to give the reader some idea of what the building is ya know?

- I liked the basis of it overall, (WFP) is so cool! you added aspects of it, like note taking, taverns and lots of chatting. You really changed it from some words on the screen to a bustling bar. I liked that.

Overall I liked it, I can't wait to read the next ones! Keep up the good work and have a great rest of your day!
- Stellarjay

Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),

Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!

First Impression: Okayyy...this was hilarious. It surprisingly had the beginnings of an actual plot who I was not expecting but is definitely not unwelcome...aaand...well...it mixes the humor into the story really well. I definitely enjoyed reading it quite a bit.

Anyway let's get right to it,

The clock struck twelve as Carina stumbled upon the craziest building. She had been treading through what was known as the Yewis Forest and had become tired. Before she knew it, Carina ended up in front of a tavern that seemed to be having a party.

Party in the pad, thought Carina. The building was labeled: "WFP Tavern".

"Awesome!" mumbled Carina drearily as she walked into the tavern and drowsily asked for some Procrastination Wine.

"Who might you be?" asked a cowled figure. The figure was a little bit on the large side and covered his body completely with a black cape and hood.

"Uh, I'm Carina," replied Carina, chugging a large dose of Procrastination.

"Greetings, my friend," said the cowled figure, "May I inquire what possessed you to enter this tavern?"

For the first time, Carina noticed that the entire tavern was bustling with people jumping around, jotting notes, and just chatting aimlessly about anything.

"Oh. I'm in a pad," said Carina, absorbing her surroundings. Pads were usually boisterous-- especially WriterFeedPads. Sadly, it seemed like Carina had stumbled upon one of the crazier pads.

Taking another long chug of Procrastination, Carina began to wheeze and sputter.

"Oh dear," said the figure. The figure patted Carina's back and then said, "You know, that reminds me of my farm."

"Ah, let me explain," said the figure, "First, I must introduce myself. I am known as Yoshi. You've probably heard of me before, I bet. Figured I was going to be pretty popular around here."

"Who are you?"

"What!?" exclaimed Yoshi, banging his stubby green hand on the table indignantly and spewing fire with general annoyance.

After calming himself down, Yoshi revealed himself to be a big green dino.

"Okay, you see, I own a brain juice farm. A top notch one, in fact," said Yoshi, "A possible side effect of brain juice is wheezing."

"Ah, wait, did you just say brain juice farm?"

"Yes."

"I would love to have a tour!"

"You would? Of course, you would have to pay . . ."

"I will pay you in High-Fives!"

"What! High-Fives! No way! Yes! You can have a tour! Definitely! The best tour! Wheeeeee! High-Fives . . . !"

Hi! Spunky here!

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The building was labeled: "WFP Tavern".

"Oh. I'm in a pad," said Carina, absorbing her surroundings.

High-Fives . . . !"

She had been treading through what was known as the Yewis Forest and had become tired.

"Uh, I'm Carina," replied Carina, chugging a large dose of Procrastination.

Momo is here to review this very funny story!! i was laughing the whole time XD

This was hilarious, and it's safe to say that I love any story featuring YWS users. It makes you feel like you know the people, because you do! There was something I wanted to point out, so let's get started!!

...and drowsily asked for some Procrastination Wine.

"Who might you be?" asked...