Young Writers Society

I like this poem! The idea of a nightmare so terrifying gives me the chills. I was relieved when the narrator woke up, and laughed at thinking momentarily the dream was real. To think you are experiencing that, and then to be merely in your warm, cozy bedroom is amazing. Keep up the good work.

It's really good to know that the person didn't get raped (I'm assuming that was what the nightmare was about). Really good.

it is a nice work. but u can make it better. don't give full sentences. make the readers earn it. give some rhyming to the end or at least make the beginning similar. something has to be done to make it more adoring. write some simple theme like this and make it very beautiful. not with adverbs and adjectives but the style. try this same work in something ornate. you have to try a lot. but you will find that the result is very amazing. you will discover more in you. anyway its good to start with. i hope you will consider my suggestion.good luck. keep going.

It's a good poem, my only concern is the part were you say:
"I suddenly i heard a noise and looked around as i woke..."
I don't know if you did that on purpose or if it was an accident but "I suddenly i" sounds very wrong it would have been better if you eliminate the second I.
Another thing I notice is that you keep writing "I" in lower case when "I' is always suppose to be written in upper case. Overall, the poem does have a sort of thriller feel to it that makes me like it. So keep writing, just try to fix the ''I'' part and you'll be fine.
Hope it helps,
Ary
P.S. don't let this bring you down, trust me I commit errors all the time.