review, so I apologise if I am a bit rusty, but here goes!
Firstly, I'd just like to point out a couple of fairly simple punctuation errors. I won't spend too much time on these, but you need to add a space here and there, after "precious time" or "words," for instance.
So one of the most important points that I appreciated about this poem is that, when you use a metaphor, you do so in such a way that still implies/suggests a literal sense, the "stray cat" becoming something fitting in the situation you have illustrated, making the metaphor more powerful.
In the first stanza I would question the phrasing, as, in my case at least, there was a slight initial misunderstanding, causing an unwanted hiatus in the rhythm. So if we look at the stanza as a whole:
"Coatless Boy.
He is walked by but never talked to.
Wondered why, though never asked the words, "Why don't you have a coat?""
So you establish the pronoun reference in the first line to be the coatless boy, meaning in the third line the automatic assumption is that you are referring to the coatless boy rather than the passers by, when in fact, as is established later on in the line, you are referring to the passers by. Personally, to amend this, I would say "They wondered why" as opposed to "Wondered why.
Another thing I particularly liked about the poem as a whole was the planned out effect of the ending. Classically speaking, it would be fair to assume a climactic or resolving phrase within the last two lines or so, however, given the subject matter, your less dramatic ending is far more appropriate, as it leaves the reader in a in a seemingly more hopeless position and increases empathy for the character.
So, for my last point, I'd like to suggest a line that needs reworking or expansion. to me, the line "Not in one bit is he understood," doesn't have the effect it should due to clumsy phrasing or word choice. I would suggest re working this line, or at least the phrase "in one bit." "in the slightest may be a more suitable alternative.
Yours,
Take That You Fiend
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