Hi YOLBYI.
I'm Sol and I'm here to review for you.
So I wasn't going to write this review, but I can't just leave this URL with things unsaid. The start of this made me tilt my head, and not exactly in a good way. Because you start with a weak/worn out/cliche line, and then -BAM!- something original with a great imagery. o.o Honestly, it would be great if you could do the same thing on that first sentence; express the main point in an original, creative way. Remember that the first line of a poem is really important because it hooks the reader and helps them get adapted to atmosphere you're bringing; it should be like a little hint of what's coming.
That's all I've got to say. *bows/saluts*
~GeeLyria
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