Dear my darling Ariel,
I am sorry that you feel the need to get upset with me. I am not purposely trying to aggravate you, only show you my true self. You are still trying to figure out how you feel about me and I find that showing you my ways before you meet me seems like a good idea.
I have had many girlfriends, but I am not saying that so that you will mistrust me, only so that you know. I have never “done” anything with them, so I will come to you with my whole self, given freely to you. I wish to be more than a boyfriend to you, but to also be your confidant, your best friend, and your love.
I like lions, but were you attempting to write a research paper or something? Just kidding.
I write to you with formal writing for many reasons. It serves to tell you that I care enough to do this with you. It shows that you are worth the formality. You are worth anything.
My dear, I want to you to promise me something, for I can no longer write without knowing this. Will you promise me to not forget the things I have told you? When you were younger, I saw you lurk around the edges of crowds, unsure of yourself. Now, I have seen you flourish. Please stay as your confident, beautiful self. The true self I know you are.
Eager for your reply,
Me
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Fourth excerpt, dang. I like finding out more about this Mr. Anonymous. This letter really shapes his character more. He seems a lot different that from the first letter but not in a contradictory way. More like in a unwrapping a christmas present...a creepy, unknown, poetic, literate Christmas gift. I really enjoyed how he said "Eager for your reply, Me" I like this because it seems more personal than "anonymous" or "your secret admirer".
once again I enjoyed the work and i can't wait for the net part
keep up the writing
Aww...
Awww. I love this guy. He's adorable!
Lovely letter. Stunning, and so touching. If I were Ariel, I wouldn't be writing to the guy demanding his identity, I'd be demanding marriage!
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Did you mean: "Dear, my Darling Ariel" or "My Darling Ariel" or just "Dear Ariel"?
Ha! This made me laugh.
This is strange, and I feel a word is missing. Perhaps "for I can no longer write without telling you this"? Or something like that? Just "longer" by itself doesn't make as much sense.
Loved it! MOAR!
I can no longer say anything. Your writing is wonderful.
. Hopefully, I will see more of your work eventually.
All I can give you is a comment. I am not alone
Keep writing beautifully!
Hmmm. This series of letters is very interesting. The idea you had in doing this is very creative. When Ariel is replying to her secret admirer, could you make it a little less like a conversation with herself? I like the context of that, but not the way it's used. This is a really neat idea! I like it a lot! Keep it up!