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Dear Anonymous (part 4)

by Xreigon

Dear my darling Ariel,

I am sorry that you feel the need to get upset with me. I am not purposely trying to aggravate you, only show you my true self. You are still trying to figure out how you feel about me and I find that showing you my ways before you meet me seems like a good idea.

I have had many girlfriends, but I am not saying that so that you will mistrust me, only so that you know. I have never “done” anything with them, so I will come to you with my whole self, given freely to you. I wish to be more than a boyfriend to you, but to also be your confidant, your best friend, and your love.

I like lions, but were you attempting to write a research paper or something? Just kidding.

I write to you with formal writing for many reasons. It serves to tell you that I care enough to do this with you. It shows that you are worth the formality. You are worth anything.

My dear, I want to you to promise me something, for I can no longer write without knowing this. Will you promise me to not forget the things I have told you? When you were younger, I saw you lurk around the edges of crowds, unsure of yourself. Now, I have seen you flourish. Please stay as your confident, beautiful self. The true self I know you are.

Eager for your reply,


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Fri Oct 11, 2013 8:32 pm
tylerthomas wrote a review...

Fourth excerpt, dang. I like finding out more about this Mr. Anonymous. This letter really shapes his character more. He seems a lot different that from the first letter but not in a contradictory way. More like in a unwrapping a christmas present...a creepy, unknown, poetic, literate Christmas gift. I really enjoyed how he said "Eager for your reply, Me" I like this because it seems more personal than "anonymous" or "your secret admirer".
once again I enjoyed the work and i can't wait for the net part
keep up the writing

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Sat Jul 20, 2013 4:20 pm
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Tue Jul 16, 2013 2:14 am
LadyLazarus wrote a review...

Awww. I love this guy. He's adorable!

Lovely letter. Stunning, and so touching. If I were Ariel, I wouldn't be writing to the guy demanding his identity, I'd be demanding marriage! :D


Dear my darling Ariel,

Did you mean: "Dear, my Darling Ariel" or "My Darling Ariel" or just "Dear Ariel"?

I do like whales, but I agree that the topic is subjectively boring.

Ha! This made me laugh. :)

for I can longer write without knowing this.

This is strange, and I feel a word is missing. Perhaps "for I can no longer write without telling you this"? Or something like that? Just "longer" by itself doesn't make as much sense.

Loved it! MOAR! :D

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Sun Jul 14, 2013 5:24 am
KittyCatMeow says...

I can no longer say anything. Your writing is wonderful.

All I can give you is a comment. I am not alone :). Hopefully, I will see more of your work eventually.

Keep writing beautifully!

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Sun Jul 14, 2013 1:30 am
FatCowsSis wrote a review...

Hmmm. This series of letters is very interesting. The idea you had in doing this is very creative. When Ariel is replying to her secret admirer, could you make it a little less like a conversation with herself? I like the context of that, but not the way it's used. This is a really neat idea! I like it a lot! Keep it up!

Teach a man to fish, he eats for a day. Don't teach a man to fish, you eat for a day. He's a grown man. Fishing's not that hard.
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