it is said
that humanity
lies
in ruins.
she lies at the feet of a titan.
a monster.
she is at his mercy.
beck
and
call.
it is you.
but love is kind, is it not?
no.
we are
the hated.
the outcasts.
the untouchables.
we will prevail.
we are the final
disease.
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Hey WiteOak! This is a really awesome poem. I loved the description you put into your work. I can imagine the struggle and fight behind it. The only thing I would suggest is being more cautious about starting a new line. You don't want to have a break right in the middle of a phrase, or the reader might not interpret it the way you want them to. Also, although this is poetry, I suggest working on your grammar. If you're going to use punctuation marks, I'd suggest also using commas and capitalization in order to keep it consistent. Keep up the awesome work!
Hi, Cheetah here to review your poem this evening.
I really liked this theme. The way you defined it was unique. I especially liked the very end, this part:
I loved the repetition, it really helped the poem flow.
The only thing I would change is how often you make a new line. For example, this section:
could be changed to this:
This was really good! Keep writing!