Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
First Impression: Well..this wasn't quite what I was expecting with that kind of title, but I will say I wasn't disappointed at all. This was a pretty neat little short story right here...and I certainly enjoyed it.
Anyway let's get right to it,
Foam-capped waves crept up the golden beach, and the sound of the ocean eased the minds of all the tourists packing up their beach umbrellas and sandy towels to head home for the night. It was peaceful—and seemingly the perfect place for a nice relaxing vacation.
But if someone . . . a more observant person, in particular . . . were to look towards the horizon where the sea touches the sky, they might find that something unusual was brewing beneath the surface of the calm.
Ooooh...I do love this opening here...it just a perfect contrast there, we have a very relaxed sounding first paragraph of just people relaxing at the beach and everything just been calm and normal...giving off a sort of vacationy vibe there before...boom that second paragraph just inserts a healthy sense of paranoia into you and you now start to wonder what on Earth may happen to suddenly ruin the day of everyone here and cause mass chaos.
Miles beneath the Pacific ocean, something was stirring. Or rather, many things.
They had been feared by the ancestors of the past. Forgotten by the people of the present. But surely, their kind would be unearthed by the generations of the future.
Oooh, that paragraph right there is a beautiful. I might just love the idea of timelines too much, but the way you mention the past being of fear, the present having forgotten and the future having to find out, its just creates a lovely sense of this world's history with these creatures that I assume are siren's judging by the title.
Suddenly a sharp, sucking sound came from far out into the sea. Strangely though, the deafening sound didn’t seem to reach the ears of the last straggling beachgoers. The water spiraled and shot downwards, making a freak whirlpool that all but touched the ocean floor.
OOoh hoo....well here we go...this is a lovely little visual here, you get that slow build up of tension and then in one sudden motion we have this whirlpool erupt from the middle of the ocean and what appears to be some sort of summoning of ancient creatures appears to be going down here.
Thousands of glowing eyes blinked open at once, staring at the strange movements of the water. It intrigued them. One by one the creatures formed a ring around the whirlpool and started chanting an ancient spell. Only moments later, a fissure started to form on the seafloor.
The ocean was awake.
Well...love the ending right there, certainly leaves you with the feeling that these poor people are not going to know what hit them at all when the full power of the ocean awakes. Its a lovely little climax there to end on, with all the seas hidden creatures doing some chanting and sort of bringing the sea to life.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
Overall: Overall, a pretty solid story here. Its got itself a simple plot that it manages to execute fairly well and overall, its just a fun little thing to read.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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