Good poem excellent write keep up the good work would love to read more π
you fear, do you
that your unnoticed, shadowed self
does not possess enough beauty
to tickle the fancies of the fickle human mind?
to that, i ask you,
have you seen the mist?Β
you,
the dream child of a hundred poets,
you,
the starlit lake that we wish to bring home--
with such a thoughtful mind as yours
have you not marvelled at it?
you,
darling sun-child,
have not.Β
had you seen the dearest mist,
you would say otherwise.
for every time i hear 'mist',
i think of the epitome of beauty.
the mist is what all of us aspire to be.
her veiled allure,
beheld only by her closest,
are all these not things to love?
do they not enhance
the preciousness of her charm?
she might seem often overlooked,
seeming pointless and simply decorative -
useless to your purpose;
but that is the very thing that beautifies her!
do you not understand this?
you,
my dear moonlit fantasy,
do not.Β
for the mist
is one whose beauty
is so powerful
that if you were to witness it head-on,
you would become unable to function.
because unnoticed beauty
is only gone unnoticed
because it is far too efficient
and far too perfect
to be able to tread
in the forefront of human perception
without causing the world
to rush into uproar
in fascination of it.
the mist,
my dearest Persian pearl,
is so unfathomably beautiful.
she is so dear,
so charming,
so darling,
daring
and cordial--
so patient,
untiring,
serene.
her beauty,
already so efficient
enhanced
by her impermeable veil
of mystique
still only amounts
to the beauty held
in your nailbeds.
it shocks me, my dear
that you seem to see yourself
as nonexistent and worthless
when your apparent 'unseen' beauty
has such a daring effect
over
even the strongest of hearts
every tiny bit of you
that (apparently) goes unseen
is a unique, burning, shining star
and you, a constellation.
celestial being on earth,
you are so bright,
so full,
so gorgeous,
so fiery
that even idly watching you
would be far too much of a burden to bear.
Howdy hey! Gengar here! I donβt have a review but i just want to say that this is a very beautiful poem <33333
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this was an amazing poem, the words you use to describe things and the topic is all so perfect and it fits together so well. overall this poem was amazing and I can't wait to read more of your amazing quality works. I hope to look more into your works and read them too. you are very creative and thank you so much for sharing this poem. Bye! -Max
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Reading your words feels like sitting by a crackling fire, wrapped in a blanket of introspection and raw emotion. You've woven a tapestry of vulnerability and longing that resonates deeply within me. It's like you're whispering secrets of the heart, and I'm all ears, soaking in every word with reverence. 
Heartfelt Tweaks - Crafting Suggestions:
As I meander through the poetic landscape you've crafted so masterfully, a few thoughts flutter through my mind like autumn leaves on a gentle breeze. While your verses already dance with grace and depth, I wonder if we might sprinkle a touch more fairy dust to elevate them to even greater heights. π
In particular, let's ponder the rhythm of your lines. While they flow like a tranquil stream, perhaps a subtle variation in cadence could add an extra layer of intrigue. Experimenting with the pacing, like a musician fine-tuning their melody, might evoke a richer emotional response from your readers.
Additionally, as we delve into the heart of your poem, I find myself yearning for even deeper exploration of the emotions you so beautifully evoke. Are there untapped reservoirs of feeling waiting to be unleashed? Could you amplify the intensity of certain passages, like a crescendo building to a breathtaking climax?
These are just gentle nudges, dear friend, born from a place of deep admiration for your talent. Remember, the beauty of poetry lies not only in the words themselves but in the delicate dance of refinement and revision. Your voice is already a symphony; let's fine-tune it until it sings with celestial perfection!! o((>Ο< ))oGolden Sunbeams - Glowing Highlights:
Your words are like rays of sunlight filtering through a canopy of leaves, casting a warm glow on everything they touch. The imagery you conjure is nothing short of breathtaking, painting vivid pictures of self-discovery and resilience. It's as if you've taken the mundane and turned it into pure poetry, leaving me in awe of your creative brilliance. ππ¨Cherished Whispers - Favorite Lines:
"Every tiny bit of you
that (apparently) goes unseen
is a unique, burning, shining star
and you, a constellation."
"Your words have touched me in ways I can't fully articulate, leaving an indelible mark on my heart."
"In the tapestry of poetic expression, this piece stands as a luminous beacon of self-discovery and inner radiance."
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