Young Writers Society

i remember saying this to you at one point in the past.
i'm going to say it again, because it's true
you're going places dude

(come back, post more, i miss you)

First things first, I love it. It is captivating, open and from time to time confusing (which if you ask me is really good way to catch reader's attention) Together this all gives a poem absolutely fascinating feeling. from the poem I can guess you love reading and you are one of the few people to have read Ulysses by James Joyce. If I got the metaphor right than I am left with two possible explanations of what you mean in the poem. a pretty dark description of pleasure while having a period .. or if I'm wrong than I must be the dark minded person here?! Who knows or even darker version which is protagonist ended like Leopold Bloom by suicide. then the first part of "I don't bleed" is explained. I also like this part:

"along the side of my stomach
and judge if the red is pretty enough
to color the bed sheets"

Because everyone is judging each other on every possible subject. and they don't understand how they became knowitall type of people.
poetry is about feelings and although I don't like dark endings I love this poem. I hope to see more of your poems <3 <3 <3
If you have some time feel free to review my poem

to quote carol from the walking dead, "i have no idea whats going on in the most wonderful way". i think that explains my emotions towards this very accurately. i like these types of poems because there are so many things that this could be about, your brain just goes wild. it really is food for the brain and this is the best kind. i would suggest changing a few words to help it flow better but other than that i think its fantastic. keep writing my dude!

Hey Willard,

I feel like your poem is really collecting a lot of attention because you've made it subliminally deep in some parts. The double meaning in this poem is impeccably balanced with the literal meaning of the poem.

I like how you're approaching the subject of a menstrual cycle as an analogy and symbolism because it really does symbolize a lot for many cultures. It is supposed to be this time when women are grumpy, and chew out people's heads, but also it's supposed to be the revitalization of the body, and to use it as a symbol of sleep, or lack there of, is really quite good.

I also like how you have some double meanings with the poem later. I'll not go into too much detail however.

Anyway, I think if you wanted to improve the poem, you should work on making it tie back into the beginning. If you want people to read a poem more than once automatically, make some sort of reference to the first line as a part of the last line or twist of the poem. Sometimes that can help draw the reader's attention to the start again as they wonder "didn't I just read that?" In this case, you'd want to tie it back to the lack of bleeding potentially, but I'll totally leave that up to you.

All in all, top notch job on this one. I liked it.