haha not to start weird right off the bat but the third from last line.
Since I'm not here,
I think here should be there.
I agree with some of the other people I am not she what you're getting at here. Maybe thats the point some oone day dreaming of a place better then their own? Or a personal peice for you that you alone really understand either way.
The peice has an intresting flow to it. I really like the diffrent imadrey and the last few lines. Starting with "this is the moment that will.." It's just an intresting thought.
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