Published January 2, 2009
5 minutes to go
Im going home
When the bell rings I am leaving
Because if I stay I just might change my mind
You are the reason I'm moving on
But you're also the reason I'm not gone yet
You push me away and hold me
At the same time
The class is filled with tension
And sweet anticipation
I can't stand it anymore
I keep staring at the door
Chorus:
Bleu eyed boy
I can't help but stare at you boy
I dosen't seem fair
I cannot think
I can barley blink
You leave me falling of the edge of the brink
All you do is smiel sweetly
Watch me die and kill me neatly
But I will not cry'I will not call
This is what I wanted after all
So when I hear the bell
I'll sprint for the door
I can never see you again
Or I might take one morea day and waste it
Just one more day not to face this
I will cry myself asleep tonight
Even though i knows its right.
But your shadow is my shadow
And now I am just a shadow
Chorus:
I proabably wont get far
You will catch me before I get to my car
Making sure no one is near
You'll tell me everything you know I want to hear
But im different
Im stronger now
Ill push you away and I don't know how
But I will run
Far away
To live to love
Another day
Chorus
Your love holds me
Your memory molds me
You voice tames me
Your eyes shame me
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Oh my gosh! Such a sad song. I can actually sort of relate to the girl in this song.
There were a few spelling errors that you should change. They were throughout the whole song.
Isn't bleu chicken in French? That would make him a chicken eyed boy...
I absolutely love this. SO TRUE!!! And it's smile not smiel...
I love that you have some rhyming in here. Yay!
Make sure you put in punctuation. That is key for showing an ending of a sentence and when to take a breath during the song.
Love this!
Becca
I almost cried.
A few typos:
"Chorus:
Bleu eyed boy
I can't help but stare at you boy
I dosen't seem fair "
BLUE, not Bleu
"You leave me falling of the edge of the brink
All you do is smiel sweetly
Watch me die and kill me neatly "
SMILE, not smiel
"Or I might take one morea day and waste it
Just one more day not to face this
I will cry myself asleep tonight "
MORE, not morea
At least that is what I think you mean to spell.
Anyway, I love the way you put this because I know I understand it. It's like you love them, but when they aren't treating you they way you need, you hate them AND love them because they can be so hard to get over sometimes.
Now I can only guess what the tune sounded like in your head.