Hey, Aleta here for a short review.
I like what you are conveying here. It actually gives emotion into the reader and makes them believe they are saying that themselves. The emphasize on the words are great, however
you're giving off a very important message, but I don't think you're executing it too well. I'm kind of going to judge this like poetry, although it's marked in other, but there isn't much going on for this work compared to others about the same message. It's kind of cliche, and most don't present anything new to the table. You're feeding the reader information about cutting and one's looks that has been given to them before already, making it less strong and not as touching to the people that relate to this. Try to tell them something that hasn't been said before, and make your writing distinguishable from other writers trying to convey the same message.
Points: 344
Reviews: 126
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