Published August 1, 2016
I keep reaching for the stars,
And yet I fall so far.
I want there to be something out there,
But reality grounds me.
I need to escape
Someone to take me far away
To see all of time and space.
I keep reaching for,
Something greater.
But I can't see it anymore.
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Hi writer, Shakthi is here for a short review...
To begin with, your poetry has a special theme behind it. I can relate it to human life in many ways. We humans are wingless birds with our imagination. But, reality sometime sucks.
Coming back to the review, your poem...yeah i can suggest something in it.
# In the third line you can avoid two 'there's and modify that line. Because it slightly sounds odd there.
#Then you can add rhyming words suiting rhyme scheme to add beauty to your poem. Yes, your work is actually awesome.
Overall, keep up your Awesome Work Friend...
Stay Smiling..!!!
Thank you! I'll definitely use your advice.