Hello WanderlustStardust! Kara here for a (hopefully) quick review!Give me your soul.
With that aside, I'm not the best at poetry but here we go!
Bold = grammar and flow issues.
Italics = suggestions and overallStrikethrough = remove
Underline = krazy Kara komments.
My interpretation:
so you explained below that this is about a song? At first I thought that it was about someone that you loved or music you loved or something. Maybe include an author's note at the bottom saying that its a personal thing...? Never have heard the song before, honestly. Then again, all I listen to is angsty punk bands like Panic! At the Disco, Falling in Reverse, twenty øne pilots, etc.
Overall:
I did like it its a little drab, but then again, I just reviewed a poem made by probably one of the best poets here. I don't like the formatting, how it's in the middle (I did that when I'm an amateur so not I'm not doing that unless it's intentional or actually needed for formatting something, like falling down or crisscrossing or something if you know what I mean) but I do understand why. Keep up the great work!
Why haven’t you given me your soul yet? --
Kara
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