Hey, FlamingPhoenx here to review your song/poem.
So I listened to your song, and I loved it a lot, I really liked the part where you said
And I'll stretch my wings
And learn how to fly
You hit the note very nicely, that was the best part for me.
Though I will say that in the beginning I had a little laugh when I hard myself in the background. I didn't even know you were recording at the time. XD Oops.
Now apart from the song where you sang it, and I got to hear where all the brakes were in the song, I didn't really get that feeling from the written down song. It's a very hard thing to master, being you already know were everything is supposed to go you can't really pick it up.
So maybe work on your comma placing, that way when you do sing it, it will be easier for you to read and sing, and not get mixed up.
Of cores I know I'm one to speak. I have the same problem with my story, when I miss place commas.
If you do find it hard, here are some things I do. When I'm done writing, I read it, then read it out loud, then being this is a song, you also sing it out loud. It just an extra little tip to pick up on all the little things.
But just because everything wasn't in just the right spot, doesn't mean I didn't love reading it. I was a really well done song. It really spoke freedom to me, and also following your dream in life. Love it a lot!
I do hope you have more songs like this one, other than the Blooming Rose song/poem you did, this one is becoming one of my favorites. Amazing job! I hope you have a great night!
Your friend and faithful reviewer
FlamingPhoenix.
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