Young Writers Society

Okay, I don't know why, but the first poem made me laugh. I didn't know a few of the words, and so I looked them up, right? And " to brood over brevity" when I figured out what it meant, I just loved it, because at that moment I was literally brooding over brevity. I interpreted Choices, as both a warning to be aware that what you do and say has consequences that you don't necessarily see, and that the things you say, when dwelled upon, created a home for melancholy to grow.

And the lines "To brood over brevity is an ailment to transcend" I also loved it so much because I see it as a contradiction and irony, but on purpose, if that makes sense. Like when an author uses difficult words it can stop the reader from understanding a really important or profound theme, but also when a pretentious reader tries to nitpick at the use of some words and ends up missing the point of the poem itself.

And Clearance Section, I also really like. It puts into words a really confusing concept that I appreciate. Also, Sorry, my reviews are convoluted, so I hope you can decipher what I'm trying to say.

Heya! Still getting adjusted to reviewing, so forgive me if I mess up.

Let's tackle your first poem - I like it. It's on the shorter side, which works for what you are trying to say, I believe. I like the way it flows when I read it aloud. Feels familiar there, and it's relatively easy not to slip anything up.

Not sure about the usage of -brevity- though. There are a few meanings, but the one I keep coming to is {concise and exact use of words in writing or speech}, and I don't think someone would easily be able to -brood- over correct grammar and vocabulary.

I feel the same way about -ailment- paired with -transcend- because I don't think {get over an ailment} when I first read that word, especially in the poem's context. I do believe -ailment- works there, though.

This is slightly my preference here, I think, but {domicile
for doleful distend} is a lot of uses of that -d- sound. I actually love assonance in poetry, but that, for some reason, doesn't sit as well as other usages do.

Now, onto the last one -

{How do you know what to say, / when the context of the world isn't explained?} is a good question, and it seems like a good starter too. Something about basing a poem on a question feels easy to mess up, though, so this is a bit risky. *There's also passive voice in there, so a heads up because passive voice makes writing seem weaker than it is*

I don't have anything else to say about this one. I liked how it felt as if challenging humanity in a way? That might be off because I'm not great at finding the meaning of things. I enjoyed it, though.

wolfy ^^

*favorite lines -

Your actions are a domicile

for doleful distend

"How do you know what to say,

when the context of the world isn't explained?"