This song is entitled 'These cruel memories build up my psyche' I wrote this cus I was bored one day and feeling emo...lol...well here it goes.
(Verse 1)I don't need your pity,
I don't need you!
I close my eyes to get away from it all,
Only to be met by my downfall.
Cruel memories fade as I live this facade.
The rumors fly,
Their accusations make me want to run and hide.
(Verse 2)Their poison tongues lash out at me,
"Get out of my head!" I scream.
Cruel memories hold me by my wrists.
I must break free.
I must be me.
(Verse 3)What we were makes who we are.
We take things at full throtle
Not understanding 'til our rebirth.
Cruel memories please set me free.
Release me from the pain I bear.
(Chorus)Don't let the demons hold you back.
Take them by storm!
Take it from those that know.
Break free from the conformity!
(Verse 4)Prisoners of the world, escape the hypocracy!
You are the author of your own lifestory!
Erase the words written afore,
And bear the chains nomore!
Repeat Chorus X2
(ending)Cruel memories hold me by my wrists,
These memories build up my psyche.
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oh i know...wait til u hear the song then it will sound better
facade is pronounced 'fuh-sahd' so that particular rhyme would not work. A couple of spelling errors, but nothing drastic.
I can't really think of much else to say. This is a pretty typical song and a pretty typical structure. Pretty well executed. Not necessarily my cup of tea, but well done.