Published June 4, 2011
That’s too bad.
That’s the end.
No hard feelings about it.
Pictures broken,
No more friends,
Parent busy home.
So go on,
Leave me alone.
I don’t want you here.
You’re the only one I know.
Now I want you to leave me.
Year by year flashing by.
Nothing there to stop me.
Only happiness tonight
Is that I am lonely.
Fighting tears every time,
I’m so sick of emotion.
People simply pass me by,
Eyes so full of repulsion.
Got to leave, got to run,
Must escape this existence.
I’m not sorry for my act,
I don’t seek repentance.
Year by year flashing by.
Nothing there to stop me.
Only happiness tonight
Is that I am lonely.
So go on,
Leave me alone.
I don’t want you here.
You’re the only one I know.
Now I want you to leave me.
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The lyrics were good, and the descriptions were present but also a little vague. That might have been what you were going for though. But the great thing is I could almost hear a tune go with it, and that's what the goal is with lyrics.
keep writing.
This is very emotional and nice. I liked the way you wrote it, with such passion. This was so beautiful.
Keep Writing!
Nike