Published October 2, 2011
It’s so easy, you’re alone
Close your eyes and world is gone
Not to love and not be loved
And to cry in silence
It’s so easy to pretend
Make a world inside your head
Where the shadow is your friend
No one else is there
It’s so easy to forget
How to hope and to regret
To let go of faded thoughts
Lose yourself in darkness
It’s so easy, but my friend
I am here to hold your hand
Do no fear, walk with me
I will show you wonders
Just remember, hold on tight
Squeeze my hand with all your might
Let not doubt be in your mind
I’ll be always by your side
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Parts like this: Flow perfectly. While the flow was completly messed up when you said There were other parts like this, and I think it would have been better if everything held the same beat. The first part had the same beat, "Just remember, hold on tight/squeeze my hand with all your might/let no doubt be in your mind..." But then it was thrown off by the last line. This is the only part that I'm really focusing on but there were a few other places that had the same issue. I liked the story behind the poem, because I tend to fall into such places many many times, but the way you said it was a bit off. I think if you just re read it and fix it up in a few places it would be perfect. Good luck in all your endevers,
So, this was good, and I enjoyed reading it, but I didn't really get what it was supposed to be about. It was a little confusing as well. You should try to clarify what your point is here.
Anyway, good job and keep working on it
~Tayla