Published July 24, 2009
The world is an oyster
I am the pearl
A naive pearl
A perky pearl
I can get my way
or go with the flow
I will bend
or swoop
and snap
a fluffy toy
a woven blanket
praise
and warm milk
is what I desire
I am four
Points:
Time spent:
IP address:
Canary word: Present
Possible AI signals:
Original Text:
Are you sure you want to delete this comment? This cannot be undone.
Mark this comment as a review? Points will be awarded to the poster.
Your comment was posted, but it wasn’t long enough to count as a review. Reviews need about four complete sentences (at least 250 characters). Try writing another review that explains your thoughts in more detail — the author will appreciate it, and you’ll earn points for it.
141,611 Literary Works • 675,149 Reviews
It's very good, i enjoyed it. very powerful.
So, um, not really feeling this. It's good and has a good concept, but it could be better, a lot better.
This is good, I don't like, but I'm not a fan of this kind of poetry. But, thus far, I wouldn't change it.
I don't really like this at all. It doesn't fit, even the alliteration isn't feeling right.
This doesn't feel right at all to me, like, it doesn't fit at all. You've got this whole thing about a child is precious, like a pearl and then that sends a smooth image to me. But bend, swoop, and snap sound very harsh. Plus, I don't really get what you're saying.
Well, this isn't good or bad, it just is.
Meh. That's how I feel this ending is...meh. I wish I could be more descriptive but that's all that I feel...