the same poem since january

Hello, rhia here!

I think I've read all of your poems, and I just never review them because I just don't ever feel fit to. They're always too good for me to find anything to talk about, and they leave me wondering in such a way that stopping to dissect that mysterious and thought-provoking creation just seems wrong.

Of course, this is no less gorgeous and perfect, but I finally felt able to talk after reading this a second time, so I can at least tell you what I think.

First on the list of things I love here was your total control of the way I read this through your line breaks and formatting of white space. I actually have a poem on here with a lot of line breaks, and someone reviewing it decided that it must have been a glitch in the system causing my lines to not all be in a neat, orderly row, and referred to it as "disastrous". Uncultured swine. Me, I get what you're doing, and love it. I feel like it's so much more personal when the writer puts this much into the formatting, because you then not only understand the author's thoughts and emotions, you know that you're reading it just as they meant you to. It just feels more special in a way.

I also will disagree with the earlier reviewer that thought the parentheses are unnecessary, they're awesome here.

My one actual nitpick is with the comma in the line "and the only thing she can remember,".
I just feel like it's unnecessary. If you take the parentheses out and say that full sentence as it is, "and the only thing she can remember, is the early morning howls...", it just doesn't really flow. Kind of the same thing with the semicolon in that same section, but I feel like that is so aesthetically pleasing that I'm loathe to suggest that it doesn't belong.

Hope I was sorta helpful and not to creepily obsessed with this poem/your writing in general.

This was just really pretty! I liked the way you did everything! My favorite part has to be: in the half empty room. This brings the poem to life and still is breath taking.
This line just describes everything and it surroundings in just one line! You get an amazing feel of the poems tension. It is really good! I agree the last few lines are confusing but other than that I loved it!

-cherry

Happy review day!

Happy Review Day!!!

Overall I really like this poem. The meaning your giving off is just beautiful, it's just a beautiful poem in general. Your last four lines confuse me a bit though. At first I read it as "she doesn't love she will never love anybody else me." After a bit of staring in confusion, I understood it. I would recommend making it to where the lines that go together are in a group order. Also I do not see the need for the parenthesis in this poem, I think commas and semi-colons would be just fine. All in all, beautiful poem!

~Sarai