It was during the winters ,when the snowflakes covered the entire Chicago town with a white blanket .All the citizens of the town were enjoying bacon soup and goose meat along with a sip of red wine.”I was alone at home enjoying a documentary film on the war between USA and Japan.”
The lonely atmosphere of my home was haunting me as time was passing by. My parents were off for a chef's seminar to Mexico. As the film was about to be over, I heard a crackling sound outside my home. I started shivering with fear and my heart was beating breathlessly. I somehow managed to head towards the entrance door to inspect what was actually happening?, I slightly opened the door and peeked between the gap. All of a sudden two strangers forced their way into my house.Both of them seem to be burglars.They both were well equipped with revolvers and sharp knives.One of them pointed the gun on my forehead and demanded a lump sum of jewelry and money from me.Totally blank with fear,I replied that i am a young boy of ten who has nothing to do with the existing money.Then the second convict went into my living room but returned bare handed as it was only occupied with furniture and some book shelves.Then the other Both of them started torturing me by hitting me with a hockey stick.
At last, they finally warned me if "I didn't agree to hand over the lump sum to them,they would gulliton me".Though,there was no hope for help or a miracle,I completely surrendered myself to them. Their eyes were full of anger realizing my stubbornness to protect money.One of them pulled out a butchers knife from his bag pack and kept it over my neck.I was thoroughly prepared to die,but once one of my parent's guidance popped in my mind. They told me earlier that upper wardrobes of the kitchen were used for keeping the powders of chilies/jalapenos and very strong spices.then I thought of a plan of be fooling those robbers."Every person has a right to get his/her last wish fulfilled'I firmly replied those robbers."And my one is to be lying dead in the kitchen"on hearing this,they dragged me to the kitchen.My head was laid over the dinning table and the knife was ready.then I made a silly excuse of fetching a bible from the wardrobe.They allowed me to do so as my end was near.As I approached towards the wardrobe,I forcefully opened it and smashed a handful of spicy powder on their eyes.I locked the entrace gates and bounded them to kitchen
then at an extreme speed I rushed out to a nearby security cell to approach for help.The rangers quickly came back to my house in search of those burglars,and within an hours time arrested them and exposed them to lockup in the police station.The officers thanked me and revealed that these were two dangerous criminals named Harrison and Stuart from north calorina,usa.the have various attempts of murder and theft.they were also the ex-members of a detective agency.Thus they managed to learn all the tactics and tricks to threaten people.They applauded me on my bravery.
Five days later my parents came back and I hugged them tightly at the doorstep. My eyes were full of tears and still body was shivering.I narrated the entire incident to them.Both of them felt very proud for having such a blessed son.They promised me to never leave me alone again in my home.From that day I learnt that:
"if a handful of spices can save ones life"
"then why can't a fainthearted do the same"
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In the world of organizational life, there’s no single discussion that causes so much fear and dread on the boss’s side and so much anger and resentment on the direct report’s side than the performance review.
I had drinks last week with a senior guy who works for a global financial institution, who had just had his year-end performance review a couple of weeks ago. He exploded in anger to me about the experience. “I’ve had it with those guys. They don’t give a s— about any of the work I’ve done in the last 3 years. I’m doing the old jobs of 4 people pre-2008 and they don’t thank me and they just want me to do more. I’m quitting.”
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“Wait a second,” I said. “In this economy? You’re going to quit over this?”
“Damn right. I can find another job in the next month for what I do. If these guys don’t appreciate me, I’ll go somewhere else.”
Why do almost all performance reviews cause aggravation? Here are the top ten ways you can ensure your next performance with your reports will be a total bomb:
1. Too vague. I love the bosses who have 10 minute performance reviews with their people, usually in the last week of the year — after being harassed 4 times from HR to get them done. The meetings are usually called on the spur of the moment: “Hey Sally, could you stop in my office for a sec?” They’re as brief as possible and give the reports no specific feedback on the work they’ve done in the last year. There’s usually lots of “you’re doing good work” and “keep it up” sprinkled in to the conversation. But how does a report take that as feedback and improve their job performance in the next year? Be specific about what you liked and didn’t like in their performance.
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2. Everything’s perfect – until it’s not and you’re fired. This reason usually follows #1. Over the years, I’ve heard lots of complaints from laid off workers who never saw it coming and then are bitter when they are tossed aside because they’re apparently no longer getting the job done. They point to a series of glowing annual performance reviews and then suddenly being called into the boss’s office to be let go. People aren’t usually resentful if they’re laid off because the company is suddenly facing a crisis not of their own making (which isn’t usually the case). However, what drives people up the wall is when it’s clear that the boss has been bothered by some aspect of their performance, but never bothered to mention it to them until the time of their firing. ”A little heads up would have been nice so I could have tried to improve in that area,” said one person I know who went through this experience.
3. Recency effect. This is a psychology term for when we overly focus on the most recent event as the basis for analyzing the entire past year’s performance. So, if you have some mistake happen to you very recently and it ends up being the entire topic of your performance review even if you’ve done a great job the rest of the year, you’ve been a victim of the recency effect. Some bosses seem to have no memory, so they only base their opinions on the most recent events and opinions from others to form their opinion on what’s happening. Plus, the world we live in today, with always on email and Twitter stream updates, makes us even more susceptible to doing this.
4. No preparation. Some bosses like to do these meetings “on the fly.” I knew one boss that would drive around with his sales guys and give them feedback from the passenger seat on long roadtrips. The worst part of this kind of approach is that it typically means the boss hasn’t given any thought to how the report has done in the last year and what they need to do to improve. Even worse are the bosses who simply cut and paste what was on last year’s performance review form to this year’s with minimal if any changes. The message sent to the employee is: “I’m very important and busy. I don’t have time to tell you how I think you’re doing at your job.”
5. They never happen at all or “My people know my door is always open.” I can’t tell you how many times I’ve chatted with lazy bosses who use that line: “Oh, my people know I have an open-door policy and they can come to me to talk about anything at any time.” I would say 80% of the time in those cases, if I went to the reports and they answered me honestly, they would say that they typically don’t go to the boss because he or she is always on the phone or looks too busy. And, by the way, they usually never take the boss up on the offer. The bosses who don’t plan their performance reviews are typically not great planners in their jobs. There will typically be other problems down the road for that boss’s work group if they’re showing evidence of being unable to plan the simplest of meetings.
6. No pats on the back. It might seem like a simple thing, but lots of bosses just don’t give recognition to their people when they do a good job. These days, we’re all busy and most people are over-worked and under-appreciated. But it never ceases to amaze me how much abuse people can take from the worst boss and the worst work environment, as long as they get some random appreciation for their hard work every now and then. Maybe it’s just inertia, or fears about doing a job search in a bad economy, but I find most people want to stay where they are working at their current jobs. Maybe they have their kids in a daycare nearby. Maybe they have a decent commute. Whatever it is, people can put up with a lot of grief. They just need an occasional bone to be thrown their way. Say thanks to your people when they do a good job. It’s the cheapest bonus you’ll ever pay.
7. No recognition for doing the work of 3 people. More than just saying thanks, it’s important to remember that something structural has happened in the job market since the 2008 financial crisis. Most industries have dramatically cut headcount. As a result, the remaining folks have been asked to take on the responsibilities of their former colleagues. We’re now going into the 3rd year since most of these major layoffs have happened. On the one hand, the remaining employees are happy they continue to have their jobs, but a lot of them are starting to get burned out. As mentioned in the previous point, a little thanks would go a long way. Most times though, bosses say nothing. The old employees are gone, the new people pick up the slack, and life rolls on. Except that there’s a deep undercurrent of resentment among lots of employees out there.
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Hi, I am Ishan212 and I am here to review your work.
I would like to admit that your title was nice but not your content.
In your story your protagonist is a boy of ten. In the absence of his parents some thieves raid his home and demand money from him. The boy refuses and then those people try to kill him. But suddenly the boy remembers that he can defeat those criminals by using spices!!
Then those criminals are arrested and it is discovered that those people were were dreaded criminals.
What do you think this story was?
Some grammatical errors., I've pointed out are given below.
There is no need of inverted commas in the first paragraph in the last line saying"I was alone................ Japan"
In your second paragraph you use capital letter for 'both', which is not required. Only proper nouns begin with capital letters in the middle of the sentence. I also did not understand why you used 'other' in that sentence.
In the third paragraph there is again no need of I vetted commas in the sentence saying 'I didn't.......... gulliton me.'
Gulliton was an execution machine used in France. You could have used some other word reading it.
The names of Calorina, USA and all other places are proper nouns and hence should begin with capital letters.
I would like to admit that your story was a good attempt.
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