Published March 2, 2011
I can't describe the feeling
of when I float away
into a misty day dream,
A world of my very own
And though I sit in math class
I might as well be at home
Oh the beauty of day dream
As I scrape the sky
Algebraic formulas continue to pass me by
Oh the warmth of day dream,
The joy of numbing bliss,
The tango of thought,
The damage of kiss.
Oh what pretty day dream
An escape from all the drama
A pillow of ideas
A lovely little trauma
Oh what splendid day dream
The crippling touch of sleep
As minds all at ease,
Baring a secret our brains keep.
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This was better than the last poems I've reviewed before. I especially like this part:
The rhyme was pretty godo as well, except for the drama - trauma one, which don't rhyme so well.
I really like your poem. I like the rhyme and the repetition of "Oh".
Now I know that I am not the only math-class day dreamer!
Keep these lovely little poems coming!