Published November 28, 2005
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Just another day
In another way
Keep on going on
Till its all gone
I wake up another day
Put on another face
Tears gone today
Try to keep on going
Reasons ever going
People ever lying
People ever dying
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Okay, erm...
I think these lyrics have true potential, but could you tell what Key it is in, and what instruments are used.
You could really quite go far with these lyrics, and I hope you can add more
Why are people always waking up in songs? And why is it always "another day"?
I think this song has some serious potential. Using another 3 times was kind of repititive and made me lose my place. In the part where you said:
Put on another face
Tears gone today
It would make more sense if you turned "gone today" into "gone from yesterday".
For your age its pretty impressive to me. Keep on writing!
This reminds me of The Beatles' "A Day in the Life"...
Cool, not the best,
I wake up another day
Put on another face
Tears gone today
Try to keep on going
Reasons ever going
The rhyming sceme in these five lines is kinda messed up.